The titanic
The Titanic is a big luxury boat That crashed over 100 years ago. Heres the story of the titanic and HOW IT SUNK!!!!!! . it could have been still here if it went straight into the iceberg. When it hit the the iceberg it screeched!!!!!!!! along.
In southampton, london, the the titanic was built to be a luxury boat. it travelled from southampton to new york, america carrying immigrants and rich people. The immigrants stayed in the cheap rooms while the rich people stayed in luxury.
People from other luxury boats saw a lot of icebergs
so the radio called the titanic but the radio msn was asleep.
but he woke up and tried to turn the boat around
but it scraped around the iceberg and made a big hole
the people on the titanic were supposed to do
a drill for the life boats on the first day it was traveling to new york. but it sank for 4 hours.
This is a great explanation about the Titanic Tihi. Remember to put your sentences in paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good overview, Tihi. There are some things you could do to improve this so the reader can understand what happened to the Titanic.
ReplyDeleteFor example, if the Titanic had hit the iceberg straight-on, why would that have been safer for the ship than if it had scraped around the side like it did?
It's important to explain what happened, and you've done that well. If you can explain why or how it happened as well, your readers will learn more from you. Well done.