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Tihi

I packed my kit and off I went from the fat fish and as I went to another beach there was another big fish. So I fixed my rod and threw it in the water.I was getting pulled in furiously it was like an angry current I was pulled in the water like I was just a little feather. I saw a fin not an ordinary fin a big shark fin. I’d try to call out but noone was there to help it was moving so fast. I was to slow but the scary shark was near me. I was so scared I nearly cried. But  it just was a grey wood shaped like shark fin and I climbed out and my rod was gone and I was sad I didn't catch a fish.

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What a good brother looks like

A good brother looks like a caring and helping person and also when people are feel down they help and have a really good atitude they dont act cool if they do they really aint they try but they dont get it right. cool is caring thats the real cool.A big brother has big opratunitiy's they have people tom look after and when they grow up they will be the man of the house when they have a family they will
be the boss I have lots of brother 's but i dont think i'm a really caring brother i need help to.
a good brother is a kind and generous person a good brother says kind words not words that put you down they encourage you to reach your limits and and words to help you cheer up.


He has words that would build you up a small kind word will make a big change to someones day or life they would help you  if someone is really mean and correct you to be great and go down the right path.its realy good luck to have a big brother like that know one will think he hasent made a mystake but know one is perfict.

The realy big bug

As I looked behind me somthing began to move.As I saw it move inside realy dark room it I went in looked at it it looked like a big man sized bug it looked scary and as I went to look inside its eye's
it ran away.And i was on my way back home started to think about what happend at school today
and I came up with a joke I mite just have to bring bug repalent to school tomorow.

Im at school again and I saw that room again so i thought I should see if the monster is there well that joke was probly was not suposed to be a joke beacouse i found it again it realy looks like it has realy grown the past day so I hurry'd to my bag and grabed my flash light and turned it on and it was a realy realy REALY BIG COCKROACH!!!

TOPS

Identify the T.O.P.S of the following narratives.

T	Title - What is the title of your story
O	Orientation - Sets the scene with who, what, where, when.  Captures the reader’s interest.
P	Problem - What problem or issue disrupts normal life and needs a response from the character(s).
S	Solution  - How is the problem solved or attempted to be solved.

T	Title  - Goldilocks and the three bears.
O	Orientation: one day Goldilocks saw a house and she didint think about what she did and went in side
P	Problem:she went in to a bear’s house and ate there porige sat on there chairs and sleped in there bed
S	Solution: the dady bea growld the loudest and then she ran out like a flash.

T	Title  - Frozen.
O	Orientation one night  in  the catle when they where little elsa and ana  filled a ball room with snow
P	Problem that night elsa lost controll and as ana jumped elsa struck here with her powers in the head and when they grew older elsa was anouced queen of arendale and then when ana was dancing with prince hand and they got engaged and they told ela they want to get maried and elsa said no and when ana said why did you shut me ougt she sruck her powers and coused a snowstorm so when she found her she got struk in the hart and she was hurt so when they went anas hair was white and elsa refused to go and stoped the storm becouse she was afraid thatbshe mite make the storm worse and then the troll said true love is the cure and she went back to her kingdom and went toprince hans and told him to kiss her but he wanted to takeover the kingdom so he went and olaf came and warmed her up so then he said that her true love was sphen so she went to go look for him and then ana saw her sister she was about to be killed.
S	Solution elsa new the cure to stop the storm and she never closed the gtes ever again and ana saved her but she turned in tosolid ice and found out that elsa was her true love and then when elsa huged her she was human again the end.

yeah it's the hollidays!!!

Yeah it's the holiday and i am looking forward to it i get to have a rest of school for six week's
woohoo!!! What i'm looking forward to this holidays is Christmas and presents and family
a 6-week rest of school that's a while and i want to spend time with my friend's.doing work in the holiday's is boring you should get out side and play or stay inside but working is boring.i only work at school.

And i cant wate till school starts to and i can meet my friend's and tell them what i did in the holidays
well i cant tell you yet i just stared my holiday.Well i mite go up north with my mum or go some where i just cant stay home the whole holidays that realy boring.this morning i went to the duck pond with my dad and cousins and my baby brother it was great and then ewe went to the park.


And then i came home and i had to writ about it beacouse i got a bad report and yeah this is it the end.

the warehouse sponsor

This morning there was something important coming to school today and that group was the warehouse they sponsor our school they sponsored the year 8 camp and when they came in we did a mihi and then sang a waiata its so cool that they sponsored us so they deserve this they are so kind then they started to talk to

us and they had something in one of there hands. something big like some check or some thing 

and then they brang it out and it was a check a check of $1093.46 it seem's that they have sponsored

our school again how cool is that really cool right so we had lots of sponsors we ad a sponsor by w.i.l.l.i.a.m and he sponsored $100,000,00 for the whole  of the tamaki cluster and the variety and also did you know that the warehouse sponsored variety and variety is sponsoring our school cool right and we sang a nother waiata  and then they went and then they gave Mr Burt a certificate and gave him a $500 gift card and they had to go beacouse the year 8's had something to do.