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What a good brother looks like

A good brother looks like a caring and helping person and also when people are feel down they help and have a really good atitude they dont act cool if they do they really aint they try but they dont get it right. cool is caring thats the real cool.A big brother has big opratunitiy's they have people tom look after and when they grow up they will be the man of the house when they have a family they will
be the boss I have lots of brother 's but i dont think i'm a really caring brother i need help to.
a good brother is a kind and generous person a good brother says kind words not words that put you down they encourage you to reach your limits and and words to help you cheer up.


He has words that would build you up a small kind word will make a big change to someones day or life they would help you  if someone is really mean and correct you to be great and go down the right path.its realy good luck to have a big brother like that know one will think he hasent made a mystake but know one is perfict.

The realy big bug

As I looked behind me somthing began to move.As I saw it move inside realy dark room it I went in looked at it it looked like a big man sized bug it looked scary and as I went to look inside its eye's
it ran away.And i was on my way back home started to think about what happend at school today
and I came up with a joke I mite just have to bring bug repalent to school tomorow.

Im at school again and I saw that room again so i thought I should see if the monster is there well that joke was probly was not suposed to be a joke beacouse i found it again it realy looks like it has realy grown the past day so I hurry'd to my bag and grabed my flash light and turned it on and it was a realy realy REALY BIG COCKROACH!!!

TOPS

Identify the T.O.P.S of the following narratives.

T	Title - What is the title of your story
O	Orientation - Sets the scene with who, what, where, when.  Captures the reader’s interest.
P	Problem - What problem or issue disrupts normal life and needs a response from the character(s).
S	Solution  - How is the problem solved or attempted to be solved.

T	Title  - Goldilocks and the three bears.
O	Orientation: one day Goldilocks saw a house and she didint think about what she did and went in side
P	Problem:she went in to a bear’s house and ate there porige sat on there chairs and sleped in there bed
S	Solution: the dady bea growld the loudest and then she ran out like a flash.

T	Title  - Frozen.
O	Orientation one night  in  the catle when they where little elsa and ana  filled a ball room with snow
P	Problem that night elsa lost controll and as ana jumped elsa struck here with her powers in the head and when they grew older elsa was anouced queen of arendale and then when ana was dancing with prince hand and they got engaged and they told ela they want to get maried and elsa said no and when ana said why did you shut me ougt she sruck her powers and coused a snowstorm so when she found her she got struk in the hart and she was hurt so when they went anas hair was white and elsa refused to go and stoped the storm becouse she was afraid thatbshe mite make the storm worse and then the troll said true love is the cure and she went back to her kingdom and went toprince hans and told him to kiss her but he wanted to takeover the kingdom so he went and olaf came and warmed her up so then he said that her true love was sphen so she went to go look for him and then ana saw her sister she was about to be killed.
S	Solution elsa new the cure to stop the storm and she never closed the gtes ever again and ana saved her but she turned in tosolid ice and found out that elsa was her true love and then when elsa huged her she was human again the end.